[IRP] [charter] last round before Section 1 milestone

[Max Senges]

Hi folks


As promised I have done a good overhaul of the draft. I have aimed at two
things: (1) consistency & consolidation and (2) hypertextualizing

Basically I tried to either flesh out important bullet points or drop less
important ones.

Secondly I added thematic subpages and started to set links to background
info and references

I would like to bring up the following more substantial editorial changes:

A) Pursuing our aim to create a compact text that focuses on transposing
Human Rights to the online sphere I deleted the rights where we did not see
a need to elaborate on how they are effected and I propose to drop the
following sections:

Article 3 & 4: Security of person and Slavery: I think the points listed
here are correct, but they are so broad and in fact acknowledge the paradox
of clashing rights, but request all measures not to fall into this most
complex trap... My feeling is that these articles are not very powerful as
HR policy instruments, but rather water down our text. --- Shaila do you
want to comment/agree/disagree

Article 11: Presumption of innocence: Again I think the points made make
sense; but are we really missing an argument if they are not there?  Rebecca
what do you think? Lisa i guess you originally drafted these points

Article 17: Property: There is no new aspect to that right on the internet
really, is there? Robert please agree or argue for your point.

Article 18: Freedom of believe: Again I am not sure as to what degree the
internet represents a new context for this right or wheter it simply applies
to online expression as well.

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B) The three BIG Rights when it comes to the Internet: Privacy, Freedom of
Expression and (A2K) Article 27: Cultural participation have all received
very good input and need to be consolidated now.
Could someone from the drafters (or someone like Katiza who hasn't
contributed her expertise yet) try to write a coherent and consolidated
version?
   - Privacy was collabowritten by: Jac, Rebecca, Max --- @ Katiza, Jan,
could you contribute as well?
   - Freedom of Expression was collabowritten by: Jac, Emily, Rebecca,
Lauren, Max
   - Cultural participation & interests had input from Shaila, Marianne and
Shaila

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NEXT STEPS
I would hope that we can get Section 1 to its first milestone (= coherent
version) really soon (before the end of the month). Our next steps then are:
(i) to reach out to experts like Wolfgang Benedek, who said he would be
happy to check that we do not speak legal gibberish and
(ii) to reach out to our communities (local and thematic), spread the work,
invite people to join us. (As Robert Guerra pointed out it would be
particularly good to have more traditional Human Rights experts and
activists participate)

Another idea we could consider is if it might be feasible to make a Maker's
style version of the charter for the IGF. Remember they use very basic
"human-readable" catch phrases
http://blog.makezine.com/archive/2006/12/the_makers_bill_of_rights.html

Ok everybody THANK YOU very much for the energy and thought and time you
invest in this effort.

I think, especially with the prospect of having this hypertextual charter
evolve over time, we are planting an important humanistic seed into the
socio-technological soil that is the internet!

Yours,
max
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